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{ October 20, 2006 @ 2:22 am } · { Uncategorized }

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  1. Mr WordPress Said:

    on October 20, 2006 at 2:22 am

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  2. Vivian Said:

    on November 3, 2006 at 10:01 am

    Author: Vani
    Title: Injustice
    What is it about: Carmen is dying because something injustice has happened to her.
    What works: Nice description.
    What doesn’t: Too brief. Title doesn’t directly fit the content.

  3. perSONIAfication Said:

    on November 3, 2006 at 10:20 am

    Author: Vani
    Title: Injustice
    What its about: A young girl who is dying (and finally dies) and feels that her death unjust.
    What works: I like the way you pieced everything together.
    What doesn’t: I need to know what exactly is wrong with her: illness? Stabbed after being robbed?

  4. colintoh Said:

    on November 3, 2006 at 10:23 am

    Author: Vani
    Title: Injustice
    What it’s about: this girl who suffers injustice and dies
    What works: The tense, easily comprehended
    What doesn’t: There are a lot of questions left behind

  5. April Said:

    on November 10, 2006 at 1:48 am

    Author: Vani
    Title: Injustice
    What it’s about: A girl dying because she suffered injustice.
    What works: Good description.
    What doesn’t: Why did the girl have to die? What is that injustice that she suffered?

  6. Yixuan Said:

    on November 10, 2006 at 2:00 am

    sorry. April was me.


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